Thursday, 18 June 2015


We are learning to use specific vocabulary to help create a vivid picture in the readers head - so they can imagine themselves in the story!

To help create a vivid picture for the reader we can describe what we hear, see and feel. We listened to the sounds of a thunderstorm then wrote about what it would be like to be in the storm, what we might hear, see and feel.

Author Holly

Drip drop was all I can hear as the rain crackled down from the clouds. It started to get heavier and heavier until BOOM! BANG! It's not a little shower anymore it's a big lightening storm. Oh no! There's a puppy outside, someone has to go outside to get it! It's too wet and windy for me to go outside and get it but it's wet and shaking. Ok, I unlocked the door and got the puppy. It was soaking wet so I got a towel and dried the puppy off and lit the fire so the puppy could stay warm. Achoo! Achoo! The puppy was sneezing a lot so I gave it a blanket and cuddled it to keep it warm.

Author Maddie

Boom! Flash! Flash! Swish! Swish! Woosh woosh woosh! The rain is so hard now that I don't think we will be going to the farm tomorrow. Boom bang flash bang neigh flash bang! What? I thought that sounded like a horse. Where could it be and what could it be doing in the country? Boom bang. I want to help. But you can't I gasped, you don't know one miniature tiny thing about the absolute best best thing ever which is animals. Without one more word I ran out to find out what was going on. The noise of the rain and the animals got louder and louder. I think I need to turn right one more time....Oh wow, I am going to have a gigantic problem to take one pony, one dog, one calf and foal home with lightening bolts that would be attracted to the bridle of the horse besides the animals will also get spooked. This is the most gigantic amazing troublemaking problem in the world! Well, I thought I only had one idea, it is a bizarre troublemaking idea but it just might work!! So, I did it. I broke off some flax and weaved it into a bridle again. It took determination and trust but I did it. Now I will ride the horses leading the foal calf in front and the pup in the back. Oh, I just spotted a very little duckling. I thought I will take it in my pocket and I did. I rode and rode and rode all the way to the farm. Then when I reached the horse paddock.... boom bang swish flash flash. It was still very stormy in fact it was raining even harder so I quickly dropped off all the animals except the duckling. To get to her place I had to run and run and run then I jump and stowaway on the trailer of a fancy tractor. It was dark and thundery. Lightening and rain was closing in on all angles. All I could do was wait. Cheep cheep said my chick sadly. "Out now," I whispered. I snuck out and sprinted to the pond. There was lots of ducks. I put the duckling right next to one of them. Now that I know that all the animals are safe I curled up in the barn for the night. I wonder when the horrible storm will end.

Author Bailee

Plip plop plip plop BOOM! Hail started to come bucketing down. BOOM BOOM slush. Aahh everybody started to gather around to keep safe but a tree fell over them. It nearly hit them. The tree caught on fire and everybody started to scream. I heard my cat in the burning tree. Meow meow meow. I quickly grabbed a fire extinguisher and pushed so I grabbed Meow and put the fire out. The people cheered for me. We all had a big crazy mess to clean up but we had to leave the clean up till later when it stopped raining. It was hard work cleaning up everything and it took us hours. Everybody was so tired. We had to sleep outside.

Author Janice

Plop plop the rain was sprinkling down onto the ground but suddenly BOOM! BOOM! BOOM! it's thunder. So I covered my ears CRASH! CRASH! here it comes. The lightening was flashing. Suddenly, the roof came off the house and the lightening flashed smashing onto my window. Crack! Quickly, I rushed outside and climbed one of my apple trees. It had a tree house. I got some apples, opened the door and then I shut the door and ate the apples. Finally, the rain and the thunder were gone so I went back into my house but my window was still broken. I called the builder to fix my window and he arrived one hour later.

Author Damarco

Scratch scratch scratch. I can hear the car going fast with the rain on the road. Outside the dogs were howling and howling because they are scared of the darkness. The thunder goes boom bash boom bash and the lightening goes crack crack. Swish swish swish the wind makes the leaves blow down. I was in my bed and there was a loud cracking sound and the glass from the window fell on me. Now I am stuck in my bed because I am surrounded by glass. I need to climb down the bottom of the bed.

Author Tyler

Pitter patter pitter patter went the rain as it poured down on my rooftop. I was tucked up in my bed. I heard loud thunder and lightening. By the middle of the night the rain got louder and louder. The rain grew heavier and heavier. The lightening struck the house. Just then I heard a loud SMASH. I looked up and I saw a big hole in the ceiling. Water was pouring down onto the floor. Just at that moment there was a strike of lightening in the sky. One minute later..... The house was 3 meters under water. I had to swim to stay alive. I held my breath and swam down to the bottom and when I was at the bottom I grabbed the rug and swam back to the top and pushed the rug into the hold and then I told Mum to open the door. When the door was open all of the water poured out and I fell onto hard ground. "Ouch," I said. "Well at least all the water is gone," said Dad.

1 comment:

  1. wow! I loved all of the story's. I thought they were awesome! Keep up the good work.